Well, my first comment is how interesting that Hunter and Sophie seemed to focus their poems on Donald Trump. Hunter seems to take a very negative point of view on the character of Mr. Trump insinuating that Mr. Trump caused the end of the world. Is that right, Hunter? Your lines, "he looked like a oompa loompa......said the tan spray cans......" I infer these lines as how fake Mr. Trump is. But, what is an oompa loompa? Sophie's poem makes reference as well to this fake tan - creating a visual of Trump being orange was great! I liked the personification of "the congratulations card that doesn't have his name...." The outcome of Sophie's poem was that Trump did not win in contrast to Hunter's where he did win but apparently caused the destruction of all of us! Good expression of your points of view!

Sam, I think that your poem could be very offending to some people especially pilots that are very highly ranked at big airplane companies. I think if one of them read your poem then it might scare them out of doing their job anymore as a pilot. Not only that but it may scare customers also and then airliners might have to shut down because people aren't flying with them and the company may not get enough money to pay the pilots. One treason I thought of that was because at first when the AIRBUS A-380 came out the battery was getting so hot that the planes pressure decreased so then the planes got taken out of service and the battery had to be remade to fit the requirements.

Hunter i think the pinata line in your poem shows that stuff as innocent as pinatas can be mistaken for evil items. In many cultures they serperate there youth from the outside world. This is like trump because he wants to keep immigrants out.

I like how Indya described the book worm. She said that she was a real book worm says the torn page and wrinkled scalp. She also explains how she has bandages and burns which leads me too think that she was hurt and that is why she has no friends. I also like how maddie described how the girl is very lonely but still has creativity to guide her. She also put how the girl might of been hurt from people who couldove kidnaped her and how she described the gruesomeness of how she might of been hurt.

One of the ones that stand out the most to me is Tiffany's poem. The biggest reason i like her poem is because how much it relates to her life. I feel that when writing our work will be filled with more creativity and passion is you as the writer can relate to it. Other poems that people wrote about them self were David and Caleb who's, I also though were very meaningful. Though in Tiffany's it did not really match the abandon farm house because it did not have that one big thing that happened, causing the reader to want to keep reading. Though overall it was a good poem. One more poem that I like was Anna's poem. I like how in the first to stanzas it describes different people, in this case the boy who is not very popular and a girl who is very popular. As the it comes into the third stanza the two people are conjoined ending on a happier note ending the poem with wonder on what the boy will do.

Arianna, I didn't see much personification or any literary devices in your paired poem but you did say"mountains of empty food containers" this is kind of saying that she got very hungry at times, it's kind of like you did a step by step process, though I did like how in the end of your poem you left a clliff hanger "What to do next. Was a question she could not answer." kind of left me with a mysterious feeling. I also like it when you didn't say exactly what climax of the poem, instead you just gave good detail about what is going on. Another thing I liked was how the feeling of the woman have changed from being exited to disappointed, this is where the climax or the big part of the story happens. I do not know how the title of the story and the poem match together because when I saw the title I thought it was someone whom had past away. Overall I liked your poem.

Many of these poems were really good. I laughed and could relate to some of them. The one that stood out to me was Andrea's poem. Her poem made me wonder about the boy on either if he died or he just simply just went somewhere else. Furthermore, I like how she used her personification and metaphors. Also, I liked Caleb's poem because it is obviously about himself. I think that your writing will be more creative if you write about what you experience or yourself

A lot of these poems were really impressive to me and had some awesome metaphors and similes. One poem that really stood out was Landace's poem. There was so many fantastic literary devices in it. "A nice person wrapped in a cloth of sorrow turning the cloth into a wet sponge," was one of my favorite comparisons in her poem. When you start running a towel under water, it first becomes damp, and then wet, next soaked, and finally sponge like, completely soaked through. This line brought this kind of visual into my head really well. You can think of people like a cloth under water. Water might represent the stress and pressure of life. It helps me visualize how stress can build up on someone and cause a lot of pain before it soaks through you completely, which really leads to bad things happening. Overall, I thought Landace's poem was really good and I applaud her for it.

One poem that really stood out to me was "The Other Twin." The last stanza was very gruesome, but it shows that all people need love and attention, especially in the other twin's case. They were neglected because their twin was better than them. The twin, I think, had these "nightmares" that led them to do horrible things, like psychotic episodes. That was the really creepy part of the poem. But, like we discussed, the monster grew, out of neglect, inside the twin, until it took over. Ethan's poem was named oddly, and the 'tornado' didn't really fit with the other two stanzas. The second stanza though, caught my eye because the character nailed soup cans to the wall. I don't think that was mysterious, but certainly odd. Anna's was really good, the way she set up her characters different "social status" and how she showed what went wrong instead of telling the reader. The box of melted chocolates was a nice way of showing that the boy didn't get to give the girl the chocolates. I also like the story, it's really relevant to middle school.

One of the poems that I like was Nick's poem. He used all of the things on a bus and gave us an idea of what they would be thinking, and most of them are negative responses about the kids on the bus. This poem shows all little dirty secrets that go on in the bus. What my favorite part is near the end when it says "" Watch out" said the front of the bus" this shows a climax and another line where it shows there is a climax is also near the end ""Go left!" said the steering wheel". These show that something bad might happen because they need to turn a different way and then it says the whole bus said ouch. This shows that the bus has gotten into a crash it shows that the bus is hurt like if the bus gets dented in the car crash.

Caleb's poem is one poem that stood out to me. I say this because I think whoever Caleb is talking about in his poem might be himself, Caleb always says he's not mean but in the poem he said that, "He could get a little mean" and he does get mean at certain points, he also said that most of his friends were girls, which they are. Also Caleb said in his poem that the person didn't like the mile and Caleb just walks the mile. Another thing I noticed is that Caleb said in his poem that the person in his poem didn't like to do any work, and I know for a fact that Caleb hates school work. A very obvious thing that was in Caleb's poem was he sits by himself in 2 classes, math and science, and in his poem it says that he sits by himself in his favorite class which I think is math.

All of the poem were surprising really good. The poems that stood the most out for me was Bri's poem. both of their poems I really likes how they introduced the characters in the story. Bri said "She was a little girl with big dreams says the big screen when it passed the credits." I like like how bri used metaphors to explain her poem. David and Caleb's poem was about them self. I really liked how the two boys wrote their poem i overall liked it. David's poem was very deep, when reading his poem I wondered if he thought what he said in the poem,and if he is depressed and shooting himself with a gun. Caleb's poem was definitely brighter.

I really liked most of these poems, but one that definatly stood out to me was Sophie's. I like how she added humor to her poem because of the topic. Her poem definatly would have been quite bland if she had taken a more serious perspective. I think that a funny poem was definatly excepted from this poem about Donald Trump. I like that you pick a topic from the real world and still managed to use personification so that Trump's items still told his story, Sophie. You were also able to incorporate real world aspects, such as Trump's "wall", which was very entertaining. You even highlighted Trump's "attempt to fit in", something I never would have thought to add. Overall, Sophie you did a very good job on your poem and I found it both interesting and well written.

I really enjoyed Michael's poem about the animals breaking out of the zoo. It was really different, with the main character being a monkey and having a happier ending than most of the other poems. I think its cool how you would think that animals escaping the zoo is a bad thing, but in this poem, the breaking out was the good thing for the animals. I had a little bit of trouble understanding Afon's poem though. It seemed very unclear to me who "it" was, whether it was a person, or creature of some sort. To me, I saw the poem as a killer person/thing that almost hurt their friends. I also wondereded what it's friends meant by "stay determined," if they were asking it to continue to kill people or something. I also think that this poem could symbolize something big, and have a similar meaning as the Monster song. Overall, I thought both of the poems were very interesting and different.

The first thing I noticed was Hunter and Sophie's poems. They both insulted Donald Trump, which is good, because that man has mental issues. He is going to build a wall and he thinks Mexico will pay for it. Frankly, I hope he loses the election because he isn't fit for president. Sophie's poem illustrates the present and the election while Hunter's illustrates the future and the end of the world caused by trump. Sophie's poem worked out very well, with detail and a realistic factor. Hunter's was very unrealistic and it was a little strong. But I think they were both great poems, especially Sophie's.

One of the poems that I liked was jade's. The reason why I like it is because the cliffhanger would make the reader want to keep reading though there is no more to it. Another poem that I like is Gracie's. Her poem has great meaning to it and she has great literary device such as her personification. Both Jade and Gracie did a great job both of their poems were amazing.

Landace I am really impressed with how much description you used in your poem,this REALLY helped a reader like myself picture the poem in my head.I also like how through out the poem you can really see the change in the girls attitude towards what has happened to her, it goes from her being sad and depressed to thinking about the positive and how it's not all bad "maybe was the better choice".And just to answer your question I named my poem "Loss" because it is talking about a woman losing her baby from a miscarriage.

I really enjoyed and thought about all of these poems, but the two poems that made me laugh was Sophie's and Hunter's poem. They were both were similar in topic in which was describing Donald Trump. I also noticed that their poems are both negative about this person. I am not saying that he has a good deed to the people if he becomes president because he is sick in the mind but I know all people have a least one good characteristics about them. I feel they did a pretty good job on their poem but I feel hunter could have put more effort in to it and could of been even better. Another poem I want to point out is the poem called " The other Twin". I know the author to this poem has a twin and it is funny how they go back and forward on killing each other in their writing.

I enjoyed reading Caleb's poem actually, its deep in some ways but it can be humorous in other ways. One of the lines I thought that was really funny was "he's in love with the chicken, but can't have it everyday ):" which in my opinion is very funny. I think this poem could be about how Caleb thinks about himself but it also could be someone else or maybe his reflection or something like that. I also think it starts off with a negative tone but by the end it gets more positive. I do think that the person in the poem can describe Caleb in some way. This one also stood out to me because of me thinking it could be about himself which in my opinion can take a lot of courage to write about yourself listing bad and good qualities.

I really enjoyed Andrews paired poem. I liked the idea of the guy playing on his computer until he medically can't. I admired how. The broken computer parts are telling the story, like a pattern. I thought it was really creative and also pretty funny.

Andrew, the techniques that you used in your poem really brought it to life. I could hear the noises made by the computer.
"I hope he’ll be okay,
Says the modem with the phone lying out,
Buzz, buzz, biri, biri, buzz, biri"

Great use of the sound words...what's that technique?
You have a very true to life message sent in a kind of humorous way. Bravo.
"Failure is inevitable,
Says the broken PC in unison."

I really enjoyed reading these poems. Some of the ones I liked was Nick B. And I also like Maddies. At the end of Maddie's poem she left a lift hanger which was really good. I made a prediction that the girl got abducted or killed I inferred this from the last stanza. Nick I really enjoyed the humor in this poem I believe that it was well written and very detailed I could picture what was going on through out the whole poem good job. Also Anna your poem title is very creative that is what made me want to read your poem you did an excellent job and your poem was great keep it up Anna!😀😀

I really liked Andreas paired poem. The "nerd" is described as a wacky person with long red overalls. The poem dramatically shifts in the second stanza from people not wanting to be near the boy to the boy being bullied and CHOKED. Then in the finally stanza it shifts incredibly to the boy going missing and never to be found. This poem is unique to me because every stanza is incredibly different.

Bri's poem and Anna's poem where two that really were good. In Bri's I loved her comparison between crying and water like in a river. Sometimes life can get really hard and overwhelming, and people do cry. But Bri's metaphor depicted crying so much that you drown, which could be like giving up hope. I thought the way she worded this metaphor was just perfect, and that the overall idea her poem had was really cool and relatable, although somewhat depressing toward the end. Anna's poem was another that I wanted to bring up. I really liked how she didn't have just one character, but two that she described, using the different characters. It reminded me a little bit of the book "flipped" because of the change of perspectives and the romance bit added in. I especially enjoyed how she brought the poem to a close, where the reader gets a sense of the girl leaving, and then it flashes to the boy upset because he didn't get his chance with her. I thought it was a creative poem that was written pretty well, and had an interesting story that was being told.

Henry's poem sounds like the zombie apocalypse. The zombies probably attacked the school and killed everybody, so that is why it was abandoned and there was that creepy message scribbled in blood. It could have also been the students rebelling against the teachers, or collateral damage in some war that the school had the bad luck of being in the path of.

I really liked a lot of peoples poem.They all where very creative and lots of them where very descriptive on what the object was.I also really liked this type of poem,when we have to put objects in a first person type view.Some of them were really funny and some of them are very strong and has good meaning to them.One that was the strongest was Soghie in my opinion.She really said how bad people really didn't like him or didn't want him to win and how the people called him loser

Another poem that I really Liked was michal's poem, this is one if my favorites because of who the poem is talking about. In almost everyone's poem they talked about a person or people, but in michals poem it talked about a monkey. I also thought that his poem hade a lot of creativity because of all of the great ways he disc ribbed the setting and also what was going on. Another poem that I liked was Elizabeth's poem. While it did not really have that cliffhanger or drastic ending, it was very descriptive. Also in her poem there was great word choices, for example one of the lines said the ghostly remands of the jewelry. I think that with all the great word choice and how well the poem was writen as a whole it ended as a very good poem that I enjoyed reading.

A poem that stood out to me was Andrea's. The story never gets dull, so it was fun to read. I like how she did not end the poem on a cliff hanger, like in the Abandoned Farmhouse poem that this was paired to. I say this because even though she doesn't say it exactly, reader's can infer that the boy died. I also like that the poem starts with a description of the characters looks, because that really adds to the story, as I would have been confused without. Overall, I found this poem very fascinating, even though the tone is sad and serious.

Sophie, I liked your poem about Donald Trump. It was very interesting because at the bringing of the poem I thought you were going to make him win presidentsy. However, by the end I was very happy that it changed because it gave it more of a plot twist. One line that I liked from you poem was when you said "congratulation cards that doesn't have his name on them"
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Anna's poem really stood out to me because, other than the last line, "something went wrong that night" it almost perfectly represented somebody I knew last year at my old school. Also I liked how you 'spoke' for two different people and their specific thoughts and feelings.

One that stood out to me was David's poem. Although his poem was very short it had a lot of meaning behind it. Through out the poem it explains his feelings towards himself, I may be wrong but I think that David wrote this poem about himself. I will say that his poem did end with a suppressing twist, it went from him explaining his grades,parents, and social life to a gun shit nearly hitting him. Overall I think that his poem was very well written.

I thought that David's poem was very deep and meaningful. It starts out being sad and gloomy describing this boy, saying how he has bad grades and no friends, then gets a lot more serious in the last stanza. The boy tried to kill himself, but there was someone that saved him from the bullet. It added a lot more suspense making me want to keep reading it....

Calebs poem seemed like a biography of him which it probrobly was and was very interesting because it didn't follow the criteria and didn't match the abandoned farm house. I think that he could've added a something went wrong and also he could've added more hyperbole.

Caleb's poem had a lot of personification I enjoyed reading his poem. I did like how he related it to an actual person it seemed very realistic. Compared to my poem yours was more Jon fictional than my poem that had lots only ficion

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All the poems were amazing. And one poem that I really liked was Anna's. I like how she describes both characters in the poem and that their both really different from each other. The reader can really picture the poem and how the characters are. So great job Anna.

Tiffany's poem was very different than the others. Tiffany's is about what I think is to be her having a great time with her family, and is probably the happiest poem listed. Many poems like Henry's or Jade's have some pretty morbid endings, but Tiffany's is the exact opposite!

Sophie, I liked your poem about Donald Trump. It was very interesting because at the bringing of the poem I thought you were going to make him win presidentsy. However, by the end I was very happy that it changed because it gave it more of a plot twist. One line that I liked from you poem was when you said "congratulation cards that doesn't have his name on them" it was a good way to describe that he lost.

Another one of the poems that stood out to me was Sophie's poem about Donald trump. i like how she explained trump in a very negative way because everyone hates trump. I like the line " from his attempt to fit in too many stray tans" I thought hat line was really funny. Donald trump is very orange and probably gets his orange skin from the too much sprays tans he uses. I know I mentioned David's poem in my early post, but I want to talk about it more. David's poem was deep and had very strong words.The poem was also very sad, I want to know what happens next in the poem.

Hunter's poem seemed kind of funny. I think this because when the poem said, "He looks like an oompa loompa, the multiple can of spray tan say together." Also when the poem said, ”The burning sombreros and piñatas said in unison” I thought that the personification was interesting in a way that you would never think to write it. The last thing that I want to talk about is out of all the things you could have written about, why Trump? And I don’t mean this in a bad way, I just want to know why.

One that was interesting to me was Tiffany's. Her poem had a happy ending, while many, MANY others chose to go the gruesome route. It offered a little light in the way of all that depressing poetry. Tiffany describes the scene as it is happening. Kind've like interviewing the beach bags and shovels, instead of them just speaking, telling you the story of what has happened. Another poem that I though was interesting was Billy's. It wasn't exactly like a paired poem, but it does deserve credit for abstract thinking. The last line, "Refrigerator!" could symbolism the twist endings a lot of these poem have. The last stanza is the dumping ground of the symptoms of what went wrong. In many of the peoms I read, the person is killed, hospitalized or is sad in the last stanza. Rather in the reverse order, if the character has a bad life, a good thing happens to them.